I like the approach that “things” other people blow off are actually vitally important. Well written!

This is good. But it sounds like just a beginning or a middle. I’d like to see it sequelled. Good speech. Nice view of the challenge.
Abby x

Thanks y’all. I hadn’t thought about continuing it, because I felt like it stood well enough on its own, but now I may take a second look at Slain’s world. I’ve kind of developed a habit of just coming up with snippets of a world. Maybe it’s time I expanded one a bit.

Very nice, it’s a great interpretation of the “CSI” sort of scenario. I like how Slain (great name, by the way) acts superior to the clerk, and I can just see him finding some amazing clue and pissing off the clerk. Thanks for entering!

I like it but it feels cut off somehow. Like it should be longer. Maybe a sci-fi story. Nice take on the challenge

The sequel is now up, and it’s the starting of a sci-fi story.

Hmm, or perhaps something more sci-fantasy.