This is my first attempt at writing pretty much anything since ficlets, hope you like it and feedback is always welcomed.
I absolutely loved that. Reminded me of Clint Eastwood in Gran Torino.
I’m afaid I haven’t seen Gran Torino yet, but glad you loved my story :D
Lovely. You captured the atmosphere of the storm and the bitterness of the old man, beautifully. And a nice twist of the knife that his justifiable anger at the young boy had left him alone 10 years on.
Lovely. You captured the atmosphere of the storm and the bitterness of the old man, beautifully.
And a nice twist of the knife that his justifiable anger at the young boy had left him alone 10 years on.
Dark and bitter. Repetition used well for emphasis. (Maybe change “either, and” to “, but”, but that’s just my opinion…) I am left almost tasting the emotional fall-out of his resentment and the hopelessness of the world he made for himself. Brilliantly crafted.
Dark and bitter.
Repetition used well for emphasis. (Maybe change “either, and” to “, but”, but that’s just my opinion…)
I am left almost tasting the emotional fall-out of his resentment and the hopelessness of the world he made for himself.
Brilliantly crafted.
The bitterness and hint of denials of an old man comes out clearly, and the role of the storm in the piece is beautifully crafted. The structure is well set.
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