Hmm… I thought I’d already commented on this piece.

Then again, perhaps we did it in a side channel.

I still like the direction you’re taking with the City of Dreams set, and you’re getting better at expressing it, too.

This is a bit of an interlude, though, and only really works in the context of the rest of the story.

You need to write more of this! :-)

There is a little more. Go up one story: you’ll note two sequels. The other sequel is Pauline’s view of what happened after the kiss. I’ve also entered a couple of ficlets from this story into other challenges, so I’ve not been able to link them here:

http://ficly.com/stories/3090
http://ficly.com/stories/3306

I’ve sort-of lost the inspriation for this narrative, as it seemed that I was writing it and nobody except dkscully (whom I know outside of Ficly) was reading it. As you yourself say, we crave the attention of strangers: maybe your attention will provide some impetus to carry on in my Manchester-themed LGBT novella. Thank you.