Oh…I am so humbled! This is the first time someone sequeled one of my stories that wasn’t built for sequeling challenges. I love our colorful future! the red beams of light…the badges. This definitely is a sad ending. But it gives close to my character’s grief.

Yes a sad ending if left alone without a sequel. However, I do think that anything is possible for our over-weight hero.

What I find most interesting is that I don’t picture the character as overweight, more regular, stuck in a world full of stick-people…

Good work on giving background whilst not feeling rushed, and the ending was sad indeed. I don’t know about the last-minute regret after seeing his sister, I think it would have been more powerful for him to have lost the will to live even at the sight of someone important to him…

But that’s personal taste – well done! MH :)