I didn’t see that coming! Beautifully written and cleverly twisted.

I am studying your work with great interest. Especially your paragraphing, which becomes an important element in your composition. Here the paragraphs become very short, yet no two of them can well be combined.

Well written. Well paragraphed. Some incredibly subtle language techniques going on methinks. Even if not deliberate, “Cooing of the Congregation” lightens the tone before the plunge.

I would say that the first comma is unnecessary before the and, but it does work.

Very nice twist in the mix. Character developement of Stewart is good but uncertain (necessary for the twist I guess)

This is a great story describing an uncertain moment -

Well done,
Abby x

I love every single sentence. Especially the twist. I thought it was the groom having second thoughts until that very last line!!
I’m getting that Twilight feeling.

He’s going to regret not telling her for the rest of his life! This flows so nicely. I definitely wasn’t expecting the ending. Another wonderfully written story.

This was beautifully constructed, with a twist I absolutely did not see coming! Nicely done!

Took me a bit to get the twist. Nicely done in that respect. Once I got that it made for a tortured little moment fo the poor guy.

Ahhh, the creepy vibes of unrequited love.

I’ve never heard a priest say those words, but it was twist-y.

But it looks like I’m the only one going to give this a 4/5. D: Sorry Ed.

Mr.G every priest says those words here. Don’t blame the Brits cos we’re more awesome than you!

perfectly executed twist. :)

I didn’t see the end coming. Wonderful build up to it. It reminds me of a story I wrote back when Ficly was Ficlet. Same sort of premise, but the setting was the reception. Good one!

My back is smarting from that unexpected twist!

Regret…

Nice story! I loved the twist.

wow, very well written. no wonder its featured.

I remember reading this yesterday and wondering if it would get featured. Well, here we are. Congratulations!

Heh, I had to re-read to catch the twist, because somehow I assumed he wasn’t the one getting married right off the bat. I’m not sure why, but kicked myself the second time around.

Good fun.

Rycar, I agree, my first time through I missed the twist and thought he was just watching too. MH, I think it’s because you said “the” blushing bride instead of “his”… or maybe I just didn’t want the groom to be feeling like this! Either way, good story!