people are so gullible! (Spelling, smelt should be smelled, smelting is a blacksmithing-type process) It kind of bugs me that the people are so stupidly gullible in this, still offering theories at the end. I guess it gives the creatures more time to get close, but it does not heighten the suspense in the story. I think the attack could have been swifter. But I know you love irony and I bet you wanted the people to seem really stupid.

you’re all paranoid…not your

and a side note…I think it’s a good story, but doesn’t really sequel mine. My magicians are actually trees and I’m the only person in the audience. My story is about the beauty of my home that I miss so much. All of your other stories so far have been sequels or prequels of other people’s stories where you put something that kinda goes off on a tangent. It’s ok, but I think you might find yourself having a lot more success if you start your own stories, and not just post sequels to the featured stories on the homepage.

plus I’d hate to think that my house in the woods is surrounded by demons :D

I did’nt finish it I kinda left it for someone to write a sequel

Chris, Your ficlys all have a good story line but we are not really seeing you as a writer because you tend to sequel.
G.U. is right. Spin a tale of your own to us.
Remember to put it in the mature section if its violent or for mature audiences. Cheers.

Right. Well, this is interesting, but does kind of spoil the meaning of the first story for me – I get that you’re taking it in a new direction based on your own interpretation but perhaps a better understanding of what you’re sequelling could be useful in your writing?

It’s OK on it’s own merits, but I would definitely advise following all suggested grammatical corrections above… MH :)

I would advise you to follow all grammatical edits above

No one would find my stories if they are not sequels since I am new to this site.

Not true. I joined just over a month ago and I have yet to sequel a single story that wasn’t my own, or part of a sequeling challenge.

You can be surprised how fast things pick up when you find your inner writer. I became a LoA on my 3rd day here on ficly.

It’s just that there are clear moments when an author writes a story not to be sequeled…(and even then it is ok to sequel as long as you follow the original path) If you feel like curving off in a different direction, write your own story. It’s fun. :D I’m actually very intrigued now about what you’ll do. I think your a good writer, but your hurting yourself more than you may think by sequeling right now.

Yeah I’ll write my own stories and what is an LoA?

LoA is the League of Awesomeness. It means you will comment, sequel, rate, and be a team player in awesomeness.

Oh. Can I join? I am not awesome but I am somewhere close.

Interesting twist, while keeping the excitement and intrigue of what exactly is closing in on the humans. Personally, I think the fat man should be the first to be eaten… mainly because he can’t run fast, but also because stupid people should be the first to die. it’s survival of the fittest. Anyone who thinks all that teeth chattering was caused by squirrels deserves to get it.

Anyway, I disagree with marli’s comment about sequeling. Sequeling is what makes ficly awesome. Anybody can write their own story and publish it on the internet, there are hundreds of sites that allow you to do that. But being able to take someone elses idea, then morph it and add to it make this site great.

Interesting twist, while keeping the excitement and intrigue of what exactly is closing in on the humans. Personally, I think the fat man should be the first to be eaten… mainly because he can’t run fast, but also because stupid people should be the first to die. it’s survival of the fittest. Anyone who thinks all that teeth chattering was caused by squirrels deserves to get it.

Anyway, I disagree with marli’s comment about sequeling. Sequeling is what makes ficly awesome. Anybody can write their own story and publish it on the internet, there are hundreds of sites that allow you to do that. But being able to take someone elses idea, then morph it and add to it make this site great.