I wonder what she’ll do with the pen…this was an interesting snippet, I’d like to see a bit more character development though.

It’s now a three parter, and there’s a tiny bit of character development. I would have fit in more, but i wanted to keep it at three parts. The reason the sequels weren’t up earlier is I was writing them in real time.

I think there’s enough character development hinted at here to keep it interesting – he’s benevolent, giving – but why? She doesn’t seem to trust easily, is used to a life of isolation – how come?

Questions are good at such an early stage of a piece, and this was well written – thanks for entering! MH :)

Thanks! I’m a big fan of character development and subtle information.