Oh. My. God.
You win.

;) I try. Thank you.

Pahahahaha.

Fantastic. Congrats.

Other than the typo – excited – this was really very chilling indeed! There is something about that image of empty eye sockets that’s just absolutely chilling…

The fact you managed to give hints of his motivation, as well as a title referencing Kander and Ebb’s seminal Broadway classic, makes this great, great stuff!

Yup, just the one typo and the a couple of missing commas around the dialogue. This is a chilling story!

Thanks for pointing out the typo. My eyes ran write over that!

Awesome! And loving the Chicago reference! Amos Hart isn’t taking it anymore.

Am I the only one that didn’t get the references?!

It was good anyway.

Well done!

Shiver.

Short and very effective – I like very much.

Having seen ‘Chicago,’ I can’t help but listen to the Cellophane song in my head while reading, sorta setting the soundtrack for this piece, which I think makes it creepier/darker (Yay)!

Amazing amount of story, plot and character development in just a single sentence. This would make a great First Sentence.

applauds