Sounds like the beginning of a beautiful relationship.

Oh, how sweet, but not a story on its own therefore you MUST SEQUEL!!
Only correction: doc’s say should probably be doc says.
Other than that, fantastic!

Thank you both! I’m glad you both like it!

Awww, this is really sweet and I look forward to reading the sequels.

This is a nice moment, and a very good introductory scene. It has a touching innocence with a somewhat subtle hint towards something more menacing underneath. Though that may just be my twisted mind adding stuff that isn’t there.

I’m disturbed by your initial cap usage within the middle of sentences though. Also, I think there should be a question mark after their friends names, Rachel and Adam. In that instance, I hear those responses more question-like, rather than statements.