Interesting development. I like the lostness the character is feeling and the loneliness of the scenario. I just feel that there wasn’t a lot of developments in the story.

Very nice job of staying consistently in the present tense which works relaly well for this amnestic protagonist as he tries to figure out what’s going on. Nicely told. My one nitpick would be the conflict of a guy, a dog, and some number of old people on this “deserted” beach. I know what you mean, but it just comes across as a bit silly to detail everyone there and then say it’s deserted.

The Third Robot – Thank you. I plan to keep adding to this and I intended the lack of development to put the reader in the same mindset as the protagonist.

THX 0477 – you’re right. Deserted just didn’t work, but hopefully “empty” doesn’t carry such a strong connotation.