Very well written. Nice details about the biology and behavior of a fantastic species.

I really like how it’s all about the action here, and just along the way you give up details about the flying beast. Very nice job in that way of keeping the reader interested beyond just the bizarreness of your imagined creature.

I agree with King of Mars, the biology details are a nice touch.

I felt a little disorientated when I first read this (not really sure what was happening or how the storm had caused so much damage) so a second reading was necessary for me to get my bearings. This may or may not be a bad thing depending on what effect you were going for.

I was a little disorientated as well. I think that that would be easily remedied by seperating paragraphs. Then again, that is just a pet peeve of mine so it could just be me.

Other than that, it’s a cool story and I enjoyed reading it.
As for the story, I’ll have to disagree with some of the others for I think that the biological details were not exactly necessary. Perhaps if you described them differently they would have fit better.

Paragraph breaks added… hope it helps. Thanks for your feedback, everyone.

I think the biological details are fine for the exact reason that they aren’t explained in detail. It’s just how you describe a giant flying worm.