This is an oh so entertaining description of every final exam essay ever written. I like the repetition you put in there in some places and I think it really emphasizes the panic.

Now in regard to the challenge, You don’t really specify what actually went wrong. There isn’t any really surprise or irony and when I think of an “Oh No!” it’s more because of something bad happening all in an instant. Sure it’s bad not to finish, but it isn’t like she didn’t see it coming. Again though, I ain’t the judge so who really cares?

When it comes to the story though, it was awesome.

Sounds painful. Nicely told, enough to give me flashbacks.

Thanks for the comments!
And Third Robot – I do see what you mean about that lack of surprise/irony – you see, when I started writing, it did. But it didn’t really work at all and so I just left it out.
Ah Well.