Obviously, the character just went through a scarring ordeal, and you display the effect it has on her when she adopts the fetal position upon the couch. At the same time, especially considering that it’s written from a first person perspective, I think you really need to put more into the emotional aspect of the character. She seems so complacent about the fact that she has just been raped.

The persepective I was going for was that it hasn’t sunk in yet what had happened, and she’s been used to that sort of treatment for 2 years, just not quite so extreme. I’m going to cover her emotional state in the sequel!