Comments on A Surprise Entrance by Tyk-Tok

Jim Stitzel

Heh, very cool.

And welcome to Ficly!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Tyk-Tok

Thanks! A friend of mine who writes under the name “Concerned Reader” told me about this site, and I loved the idea! I hope to get really involved in the site!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Concerned Reader

Very nice! Good to see you here!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
The Third Robot

Nifty. Sashayed is a good word. However I wasn’t very… gripped. Obviously this has been set up for a sequel however I don’t think that you have any closure. It’s really a bit of a ‘meh’ ending. If you brought out something a little more drastic than it may have worked.

I can be nasty though and welcome to ficly!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 3 out of 5
Mr.Gabriel

Welcome to Ficly!

Great way to start off. I’m guessing the dialouge is sarcastic, which in that case, i love it!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Tyk-Tok

Concerned Reader: It took me long enough, eh?

The Third Robot: I understand what you’re saying, and I’ll keep that in mind.

Mr Gabriel: Why yes, indeed it is! :)
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
ElshaHawk (LoA)

i think sahsayed and the mistress comment to a male figure makes the detective come across as fruity, if you get my drift. I think that would be a fun portrayal, however. The tall drinks of water have pecs and stubble… hee hee hee.
- Posted over 9 years ago.
RoseTone ~LoA~

A good beginning and some interesting banter. A sequel?
- Posted over 9 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Tyk-Tok

I’d like to, I just haven’t had enough time to get on here and do stuff with the end of the semester.
- Posted over 9 years ago.