I like this. It’s simple, yet descriptive. Good work!
Your little kid is a cliche, but it plays into the story perfectly. Separate paragraphs or I will kill you with lazers.
Your little kid is a cliche, but it plays into the story perfectly.
Separate paragraphs or I will kill you with lazers.
This is peaceful. I like how the kid is described as having doe brown eyes. Nice work.
kids are so fickle, and resilient. I’m glad the daddy didn’t continue yelling. :)
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The Third Robot
James P Anderson
ElshaHawk (LoA)