That was just horrid. I was really hopeful he was going to make it. One of the most gruesome silences I’ve read for this challenge.
Though I loved the Chuck Norris reference, I wasn’t quite sure how you meant the quotes in the bit about Chuck Norris. He’s talking out loud to himself? Or you didn’t mean to have quotes there.

Wow, totally not what I was thinking for this challenge. Really unique. It reads to me like a videogame or it’s sheer luck that the brains spelled “BRAINS”.

@THX- Yea i was trying to make sort of a side note narration within the story, i tried to italisize it but could not figure out how haha, but after looking at it, your right i might not even need quotes. If you have any suggestions on how i could do that better that would be sweet.
@ PJ- Thanks! haha

To italicize put _ at either side!

Sweetness!!
@ first I was thinking “Zombieland” (no offense) And then I read the last sentence. I thought it was humorous but thats just me.

Ow ow, hip? That sounds really painful.

he gone lol good story i like it