It’s sort of like an Andromeda Strain. My question is — why did it take so long for the guy coming in to succumb? It seemed pretty instantaneous for Ben.

I guess it could be interpreted that way. I am doing a sequel, it’ll get more complicated before it gets better.

(TFB-08-0 points) Interesting stuff and lots of questions. Minor grammatical errors like: Ben’s. It seems unclear if Ben died or not. I suppose if there will be a sequel (seems unlikely as of now), that we would find out. I’m not sure what HMV is nor the other alpha-numeric code in the Keyword section. I did like the simultaneous awkward shuffle dance of two people moving in the same direction and I liked the science-fiction feel. A little clean up here and a nice sequel and I think that’s you’d have a bang-up start to a new sci-fi series. Cheers! (No Rating)