Where you listening to Trance Nation again?

I love your description. This looks like it’s going to turn into a great series.

Actually listening to the Moby CD of yours.
Now Plastic Beach.

As soon as I can decide where I want this to go, I’ll get to makin’ sequels.

You gotta finish up your dragon thingy first!

Shhhhh.
It’s no fun it there isn’t a stressful environment. Stress breeds creativity.

Whoa whoa, intense. Very good recount. Nice sentence length variance, too.

Hold a second…

(grabs popcorn)

Do continue.

the abyss, the crevasse, is he looking for the river styx? Nice job on the hands, I can feel the scrapes. ow.

Lots of fun action, but I just got distracted by the inconsistent use of tenses, both present and past. The present tense thing can be an effective way to heighten the tension, but if you don’t stick with it, the whole feel just gets muddled and frustrating.

Good description, I could feel the pain of our hero as he surveyed his wounds.

Huge setup for the next story, and seamless despite the time gap in writing. My hands tingle in sympathetic pain.