Yay for Cid! Nice entry, there are one or two little grammar suggestions: the first sentence could maybe use an ‘and’ instead of that second ‘as’ and should it be ‘Turning, Veeza clapped eyes on’ instead of ‘clasped’? Thanks for entering :)
Yay for Cid! Nice entry, there are one or two little grammar suggestions: the first sentence could maybe use an ‘and’ instead of that second ‘as’ and should it be ‘Turning, Veeza clapped eyes on’ instead of ‘clasped’?
Thanks for entering :)
Yes, thanks, the correct word eluded me.
thelostgirl
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