Somehow the exactness of the safeguards and dangers made me empathetic toward the protagonist. While in the first story I thought it was funny that the robot chucked him out on his butt, now it is considerably less funny- it is about survival. Good sequel.

Tonally it’s very different from the “Robot Hot” prequel, I think. Also, one of the strengths of the original was a lack of unexplained jargon, something which I think you’ve fallen into with references like “AICL chip”.

I was hoping for a reaction to the tone change. I was trying to contrast the dark humor with suspense. Or something. . . =)

I was torn between ‘intelligence chip’ and some jargony phrase. I’ve switched it to ‘intelligence chip’. . . it reads a bit smoother now, I think.

hope you dont mind if i write a sequel i liked this story

Go for it!

dnag pancake, this is definitly awesome, great turn of events, it reads so fast to because its like, edge of your seat, awesome sequel!

@James – Your compliment means a lot to me. Thanks for the original inspiration.