omg, how often I’ve felt like that…(I’m sure most ppl who write do). I love the way your description is so poetic. And I was drawn in from the first line.

Really nice. I’m not sure about the comma before the “Damn”, though.

Nicely described scene a lot of us can relate too. I liked the self-deprecating correction about it being performance art and not writing.

And the comma before ‘damn’ is a grammar necessity, as any quote should be separated from the rest of the text by a comma.

Thanks. I was sitting in a coffee shop trying to think of something quick to write about, and this is what I came up with.