I like the style and tone of this piece. You may want to do a quick edit for typos and spelling. Tucson not Tuscon.

Yep, typos. But still, the style is very cool and smooth and suave and dangerous and all that fun stuff. Maybe one or two too many adjectives in the first paragraph or too. It worked well to get in a lot of detail but felt a bit cumbersome by the half way point.

Best Murder