Nice scene, full of heavy emotions and implications. I know it’s all about description here, but I think it still wound up with too many adjectives packed into it.

I like the name of the ship.

The descriptions are fun however it does seem like there’s a bit of an awkward jump between the first and second parts. Like they don’t really seam well or something…

@THX: I agree, but I was trying to mimic Lovecraft’s style, which tends to be a mouthful at the very least.
@ThirdRobot: Thank you and looking back I agree with you. I think it probably had to do with late night editing while trying to keep the essence of both the original story and the challenge.