Ooh interesting. I await the next installment.

Only thing would be that it definitely feels like an intro. Which is all right of course, but it rather seems like it needs to be expanded upon and doesn’t stand on its own.

I can tell that this is the beginning to something very good. I would love to see more. :)

@TTR, I’m working on a second installment, but it needs minor tweaks. It’ll be up tomorrow, Saturday at the latest.

I agree with above—it does need to be fleshed out, and you can tell dialogue was rushed in order to create exposition, but keeping these understandable problems in mind, it’s a very interesting start. Especially since I have a feeling I know where it’s going…

What happened to that sequel? I’m looking forward to it, too.