a few of the lines are a bit kooky, mostly the way she doesn’t leave him, but keeps going back to tormenting him. And I suppose the reason he didn’t go after her is the awkward part. :)
Uhm, I have to agree with TTR. It seems a little too scripted. Also, there shouldn’t be so many exclamation marks in the dialogue. One is enough to show they’re shouting, more than that seems just like you’re typing online and are really surprised. But that’s just me.
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