Brilliant! You get the connection and the IMPENDING DOOM! haha!

Lovely, resonant descriptions, and a great moment to describe with a lots on the personal and societal level.

The ONLY teeny tiny suggestion would be to omit letting on to the reader that it’s illegal.

Other than its marvelous.

wild scene, described very well. Could use a prequel and sequel. :)

Thanks for the comments, guys. I hadn’t planned on a sequel or prequel, but I’ll give it a shot.