ha! rebellious, and clever, horrorfan.

Thanks!

Cute and amusing in its exaggeration. Even with that, it still feels familiar, probably cause most of us have that desire to get published one way or another.

Speeds up near the end but I guess the last sentence ties it together.

I agree with THX, but I think that there is something missing from the story. It is like looking through a semi-transparent window. Some things are very clear, while others are hidden behind opaque glass. Also the first sentence of the last paragraph is kind of passive. Overall, I liked it and in the context of the challenge I even like it more (I don’t know why that it is but it is true). The first paragraph and the last sentence are clear, concise and are perfect endcaps for the the story.

Sometimes you have an idea and know what you want to say, but on Ficly, you are limited by characters. So I may have to work on being more concise. But thanks for the praise and criticism.