Oh this is good – as far as creepy endings go, this was better than your ‘Floating in the Local Pool’ one – it feels much cleaner and has a lot more impact…
What I think I like about this one is that you purposely set up clichés – the stargazing, the ‘we can’t be together anymore’ – just so that you can suddenly spin around with your ending and go ‘Ha! Weren’t expecting that were you Ed!"
ElshaHawk (LoA) 
Mostly Harmless