I had to read the last paragraph twice because it switches focus from one girl to the next. When you said Jeanne, I thought you had switched perspectives from Latiana. Maybe saying something like her friend wasn’t able to ask for help now, since you already introduced her in the sentence before and have Latiana screaming her name in the sentence after.

Great opening. I agree with ElshaHawk about the last paragraph, but overall, it’s a good piece.