Hmmm… sequel suggested? Nice characterisation there.

The view outside is blackness, that inky mass of nothing punctuated by faint points of like. That is quite possibly one of the coolest sentences I have read in quite a while – I really like this, the writing is almost lyrical, which you don’t see a lot with this genre.

On second thought, however, should it be “points of light”? I just thought of that…

I’d totally sequel this but I don’t think I can pull off your writing style well enough.

Although this is somewhat of a cookie-cutter sci-fi plot that seems to be leaning towards heroic redemption, the third paragraph is well written (as someday_93 pointed out). hopefully this isn’t a one shot ficly, but leads into a great series.