Near the end it becomes bitter sweet, but throughout the story I was…in awe! It’s so amazing: how much attention’s paid to her eyes. You can tell she’s adored. It made me smile when I read it, even when there was a little touch of darkness. I loved it!

Near-epic description. And Lucy is still a classy name.

Nitpicking note (picked up from THX): “and the whiteness encasing it is pure and unblemished” seemed just slightly awkward. Otherwise, great!

woahhhh awesome discription. you’re so talented!

N. Robertson – I’m not sure how to fix it. Suggestions?