I love this piece. t mean ordinary life. Great Work.

thanks!!

i think you should form it into more of a poem, just a stylistic feel.. so how did he do it?

OH MY GOSH KATIE! This is totally amazing. Did you turn this in?? You have to read this next reading session! Must must must must.
But I pretty much hate everything about this peice. I give it a 1 pencil. 1 for effort.
Just joking! A 2 for effort.

It was actually a challenge. That first phrase was given, and then you had to interpret it. I took it really literally, and just did something kind of dramatic and sad. And you’re right, a poem would be a lot more natural with what I wrote. I shall try that.

Turn this in for next quarter.

Powerful piece. I think ElshaHawk is right. This would make a great poem. I’d love to know how he took the world. Well done.

Thanks!! I just published it as a poem, so check it out. You guys were definitely right, it works well as a poem.