This story makes me feel completely foolish and inept.
Let my literary ignorance hang out so all of ficly can see with this one statement: I wondered if English is your native language, and if not, did you used a online translator to translate this to english? But then this could be one piece of poetic brilliance.
I get dizzy trying to figure it out, because you totally blew my mind.
So since I’m not sure I’m going to give it five pencils for making me giggle like a little school girl when I read “gas stink”.

Also, Welcome to Ficly!

thank you! i think. yes, english is my first language. i know of no other. i’m better at poetry than at the short story. i’m hoping this web site will help me hone my skills.