Weird and a bit disjointed, but feels like it just barely manages to edge over that line of being comprehensible. In other words, I think I know what’s going on, and the rest of the confusion fits the story well. In a longer extension, that would have to get clearer, but it works really well here.

Yeah, this is one of those stories where the tags help explain what the heck is going on in the story. :P

Makes me think of a slightly more HST style Ford Prefect. There’s more to this story that needs to be written.

If you can think of how this story continues, feel free to write a sequel! That’s what the site is all about, right? :)

I don’t think the universes were meant to collide.. that could be tragic.. you write a lot of sci-fi, but make it just clear enough for me to get! The mumbo jumbo in this is silly. I skimmed it, looking for the heart of the matter. I knew it was in there for a reason, not to trip me up, but to prove a point. I found it. :)