I had some problems with the first paragraph. The “other girl” should have a name, and it seems to me that the emphasis of the first sentence muddies the referent of “she” in the second sentence.
In the fourth paragraph, the phrase “they abandoned this thing” didn’t strike me as emotionally true. I find it unlikely that someone who loves would refer to the object of that love as a thing. The use of “abandoned” makes it seem as though there is no connection between the manufacturers and the Adoption Center identified in the previous episode. I don’t quite buy that.
For the next paragraph, I have two questions: how does one stand “kindly”? and did you mean to write “they mean no harm?”
August Rode