The attention to detail and little, meaningful nuances are what really make this story – ‘the look of lepers or priests’ was a stand-out line for me, really powerful, and says something meaningful…

Good work all round, an interesting little slice of story – if not entirely self-contained – MH :)

I agree with Mh, the descriptive narrative is poetic. I think the restrictions that come from ficly’s character limitations, will profoundly benefit your writing style. I look forward to seeing your style grow, and believe you have a very meliflous style.