One note: Titles should be “memories” with an -ies…that’s the plural of memory =]

This has a great cliffhanger and is a good premise for what could be a great series.

one comment on the stories continuity: he sent her a letter (which would take a day or two) and then she says he said it would take 5 minutes for him to get there.

Also, just a few minor grammatical errors. 1st sentence “now” should be changed to “then” since you are thinking back and reminiscing. Also, it should be “hair” not “hairs”… hair is already plural. Like the words moose, deer, and sheep.

Thank your for the grammar errors of change. I will say now my grammar sucks really bad. I meant for it to be like a note sort of thing not like a letter, letter. Sort of like a typically high school flirty thing going on.

But thanks so much for that. I’m making the changes.