Very cool with lots of possibilities in both directions going on here. Also impressive to pull a bit of your nano-novel, fit it into one ficly, and still have it make sense and resonate.

thanks THX! I am posting snippets that would fit into ficly form. This would take place way before the other one I posted. I think I used “Dad” too much.

Love it (as usual), but some of the talking didn’t sound natural..maybe “Probably hiding it, like me, but I think I would like to.” Seems like the ‘they are’ is a bit forced…might only be me :)

thanks! I appreciate your comments.. first draft stuff is usually rough.

Hopeful, but with a possibility of danger – serene.
Does she go there often? I like how it seems she and her dad had a good relationship. That helps out the sense of loneliness, since he’s gone.

Great job!

:O Her dad?