I think you’ve got an excellent approach to the subject material, describing the deficits in the first paragraph and the compensations in the second. I had a problem with the last line: it seems much more clinical than the other lines, and only marginally connected to the other lines in the second verse. You’ve described some of the compensations in touch in that paragraph. Could I suggest that you include some compensations for some of the other senses? “Super human” seems an odd phrase for this type of poem.

i like the way you wrote this its interesting and at first you aren’t sure what the topic is but by the end you know exactly what your talking about