Bravo. But did he try “open sesame”.
A couple of gramatical bumps unusual for you,tut,tut.push in the first para should read ..pushed. move instead of moved.

Yes, this was fun. Sometimes the simple is overlooked and therefore, by virtue of being overlooked, creative. Love the use of the Lord of the Rings characters. It made me smile.

Not to nitpick, but as a fan of the books, his name is spelled “Gand*a*lf”

Interesting rendition.

As a LotR megafan, I couldn’t help but reminisce. But it didn’t do a lot for me, only echo the film. I’m guessing that you called him Gandolf so as not to breach copyright? But if not, he is Gandalf.

obviously this is a complete retelling of the movie version, but when your muse of triteness threatens to shank you or else… well let’s just say you do it, no matter how unoriginal it may be

Somehow I knew where this was going from the first line, but I still think it’s fun.

Nicely told. I like the one guy just trying knocking on the door. I didn’t see it coming like Jae did, just figured they wouldn’t get in.