i’d not call him dude, but otherwise the dialogue is casual and youthful and believable.

I agree with Elsha as far as dialogue goes. ‘Dude’ could be just fine to pinpoint the characters as northen Californians. I think that’s the only place that says dude with any regularity. Maybe Hawaii? Regardless, I think it’s fine. I do find a lot of your work hard to read because of the format you use. The content is quite good but the packaging is hard on the eyes. I like it and I’m curious to see where this goes. Do you and Scrawler have a plan or communicate in any other way? Just idle curiosity since you announced the boy had a plan but now it’s Scrawler’s turn…

Me and Dolphin chat via IM alot but only soemtimes to we discuss the story on there