This strikes me as a snapshot in time. The dialog is obviously important, but without the surrounding context, understanding why it’s important seems impossible. The mood is set well. Typo: ‘flash’ for ‘flask’ twice.

Yeah, I figured it might feel a bit “thrown in the middle” but I had the script on my mind so I figured I’d do it anyway.

And thanks for pointing out the typo. I can’t believe I missed that.

I really like the tone here. I also enjoy not knowing exactly what the context is, though it’d be great to see a sequel or prequel.