Kind of an abrupt ending, but nice job, nonetheless. I like the description of the people who visited him.

A couple of tips— the first sentence of the second paragraph should read “…he would never have done before”. In addition, I think taking the “really” out of “really cheap make-up” should improve flow. You might want to italicize his thoughts, too, just to make them stand out.

Anyway, thanks for entering!

the “misery branded…cheap makeup” line was wonderfully descriptive. And a good job in capturing the apprehension and tension of the character, but I didn’t quite understand why this would change just because he moved. It seemed like there was more to this, and the 1024 limited you too much to tell the full story.

also, like music-hearted said, the ending was abrupt and the loss of power didn’t seem to add to the story.

Hi, havent been here for a while, but the story is basically about a recluse who is afraid of normal life, and finds a reality he can deal with on something like second life. The power going out is the end of his cyberreality…

Its a bit unclear, i know, that damned 1024 rule!!! (but probably my lack of skill, ill work on that…)