lol is this about u? I love it!!!

Well, most characters that authors create contain aspects of them. :)

OK, I’m going to be slightly critical on this one. :P Only cause I see a good paragraph in here, but it’s drowning in a sea of commas.

I like the comparison of herself as a child to herself now. It’s a good way to tell the reader what she looks like. Hard to do in 1st person. However, I think the sentences run on a little long. Try something like, “The two cutesy pigtails I sported as a child were traded in for a bun.” And you put “depending on my mood” two sentences in a row. (I do that myself. It’s hard to recognize unless you read your work aloud.)

This paragraph has good potential though.