Who doesn’t love a snarky, smart aleck cat? My only comment would be towards style…it comes across as more of a young kids story; the word “pack” seemed overused…instead of “the coyote pack” just say “the coyotes”…but if it really depends on the audience…if geared for kids, it was spot on.
Who doesn’t love a snarky, smart aleck cat?
My only comment would be towards style…it comes across as more of a young kids story; the word “pack” seemed overused…instead of “the coyote pack” just say “the coyotes”…but if it really depends on the audience…if geared for kids, it was spot on.
BTW, Welcome to Ficly!
Yip! Geared towards kids. Most of what I write is. : ) Thanks for heads up about overused “pack”. Appreciate it! : )
Yip! Geared towards kids. Most of what I write is. : )
Thanks for heads up about overused “pack”. Appreciate it! : )
haha, though jeffie seems to have gotten himself into a real bad spot. Taunting the coyotes can’t be healthy. Hope he escapes!
LOL In real life, Jeffie’s been dodging coyote. They’re nasty beasties.
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