awww =( that’s sad. beautiful poem though

Very powerful ending, and I like the subtle rhyming.

wonderful and powerful

yeah, come back with a bang!

that was great and the ending was perfect

The last stanza is beautiful. She’s so lonely.
(One thing I’d mention is that the second verse seems a little forced in its rhyme.)
Other than that, absolutely stunning.

moving and powerful, nice poeing nik

Great work :D I dunno if it might just be me, but this seems to be written from a personal perspective. Am I wrong?

Awesome. Life can really suck some days.

Hell, life can suck some decades.

Quiet, smoothly connected verse. I’d suggest that the word “one” beginning line 8 be moved to the end of line 7 for a more natural rhythm.

Is nice, but sometimes it feels like you were just searching for a word, any word, that would rhyme and make sense.

Moving verses.

Absolutely beautiful(:

I’m afraid that I have to agree with Peeled Banana. You reach for some very awkward rhymes. Also, the last line in the second stanza completely skewers the meter of the poem.

awesome!