Ouch. I liked the hopeful little tone to the whole piece, only to have it decimated by the two word update at the end. Worked perfectly.

The sentence that starts, “I never did want to rush…” felt a little cumbersome, though I’m hard pressed to say how or how to correct it. Just a style/nuance/vague point to throw out there.

Darn =[ I loved the hopeful tone of this, which was decimated by the last 2 words.