Okay, I hate to say this, but: 1.) This sounds like a rant about the kids at your high school, which could be channeled creatively but hasn’t been. 2.) You haven’t capitalized or punctuated correctly, and there’s no paragraph breaks. Maybe try to let us get to know the characters, then set up the situation?
Okay, I hate to say this, but:
1.) This sounds like a rant about the kids at your high school, which could be channeled creatively but hasn’t been.
2.) You haven’t capitalized or punctuated correctly, and there’s no paragraph breaks.
Maybe try to let us get to know the characters, then set up the situation?
someday_93 someday_93