Either the original dj was “old school” or you and that guy were together for a long time :)

My only complaint (and it’s usually had to find something to complain about in your writing) is that the narrator seemed more like someone describing something she had seen, rather than a person who had actually been there and done that.

but its a memory.. and how do you convey the feelings when there are no words? :) and its not like i lived it, so how else to describe it. :)

besides i was going for a redundancy of spinning items.

@elsha just because you didnt live it isnt an excuse. If you are asking a reader to suspend their disbelief, you must first convince yourself the lie is true. get your character in character. hehehehe
awesome lil story though it was like a wiser=older=sadder

my character is in memory, spinning through the thoughts. maybe she’s telling a story.

well i like it! lol. i seems a lot like what i write, telling stories.

Hm? DJ, club… sounds like you made a new friend! (:

A bit dizzy with some rushed spots, especially in the middle. I think just a comma or two would rectify that, if you wanted to, as it may just be a style choice. You did a good job conveying that wistful, sad reflection on happier times.