Go over this, check the grammar and the punctuation, cause I don’t have the energy right now to write it all out. Nice continuation, though!
The action feels a little confusing. Don’t be afraid to add more text to this to explain what’s happening. Thanks for the sequel. I always love it when people like my stories enough to sequel :)
The action feels a little confusing. Don’t be afraid to add more text to this to explain what’s happening.
Thanks for the sequel. I always love it when people like my stories enough to sequel :)
So, the captain must go up in smoke with the ship they happen to be on?
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thelostgirl
H.S. Wift